cet4真題作文-(手機(jī)的過度使用)--學(xué)生作文

1、120132013年1212月大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四級(jí)考試真題月大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四級(jí)考試真題(二)Part1writing(30minutes)Fthispartyouareallowed30minutestowriteashtessaybasedonthepicturebelow.Youshouldstartyouressaywithabriefaccountoftheincreasinguseofthemobilephoneinpeople’slife

2、explaintheConsequenceofoverusingit.Youshouldwriteatleast120wdsbutnomethan180wds.Peoplearecrossingthestreetlookingattheircellphonesusingwalkingsticksindertosee.從批改網(wǎng)中選取的學(xué)生高分作文，希望同學(xué)們比較，鑒別，學(xué)習(xí)。ExcessivelyUtilizingCellPhonesAs

3、isrevealedinthegraphitisaplaintruththatpeoplearecrossingthestreetlookingattheircellphonesutilizingwalkingsticksindertosee.Consequentlythereisnodoubtthatthephenomenonarousespublicconcernregardingthisissue.Tosomeextentitis

4、anundeniablefactthatthecellphonesisindispensabletoourliveswks.Finstanceitisnoexaggerationtosaythecellphonesundoubtedlyshtenthedistanceofcommunicationamongpeople.Onthecontrarytheissuethatpeopleplacemeemphasisesonthecellph

5、onesalsoexertsnegativeimpactsontheirlives.Ontheonehitisuniversallyacknowledgedthatexcessivelyutilizingcellphonesisdetrimentaltotheeyesight.Ontheotherhexcessivelyutilizingthecellphonesimposesrestrictionsondailylifewhichwi

6、llmakeuspourmeattentionstoitinsteadofwking.Inmyhumbleopinionitisabsolutelyessentialtotakemeasurestoalleviatethisissue.Undoubtedlywhatthemostcrucialthingweshouldbearinmindisthatadvantagesfaroutweighdisadvantages.Tosummari

7、zelayingmeemphasisesonthemeritsofthecellphoneswhichwillfacilitateyourlife.(196wds)計(jì)算機(jī)田文雨90分(最高分)批改網(wǎng)評(píng)語(yǔ)：作者學(xué)術(shù)詞匯使用比較準(zhǔn)確，詞匯表達(dá)較豐富，但仍需增加詞匯積累；作者句法基礎(chǔ)不錯(cuò)，可適當(dāng)增加復(fù)雜句的使用；行文稍欠流暢，應(yīng)適當(dāng)增加連接詞的使用；請(qǐng)?zhí)岣呶恼聝?nèi)斂性，段落和句子要圍繞主題展開3Exaggeratedasthepictureis

8、thephenomenonbehinditisratherthoughtprovoking.Withthedevelopmentofhightechnologyequipmentespeciallysmartphonespeopleingrowingnumberstendtobecomeaddictedtotheexcessiveuseofthem.AccdingtoasurveycarriedoutinChinaDailysevera

9、ldaysagoalmost48%ofcitizensexplainthattheywouldexperiencecertainkindofanxietywithoutcellphonesath.Meanwhiletheoverusingcellphonesfirstlywouldexertdetrimentalimpactonthehealthofus.Whatswseitwouldperfmanegativeacterininter

10、personalrelationshipsincewehavelesstimetocommunicate.Judgingfromtheevidenceabovemeasuresshouldbetaken.FirstlycertaininstitutionsinChinashouldlaunchrelevantcampaignstolimittheexcessiveuseofcellphones.Meoverascollegestuden

11、tsweshouldputemphasisonitrightfromourselvesasastart.(169wds)電氣陶吉省89分，批改網(wǎng)評(píng)語(yǔ)：文章用詞靈活多樣，學(xué)術(shù)詞匯使用也比較準(zhǔn)確；使用了部分簡(jiǎn)單的長(zhǎng)難句，可適當(dāng)增加一些復(fù)雜的長(zhǎng)句；過渡詞和銜接詞使用的比較不錯(cuò)ExcessiveuseofmobilephoneAsweallknowmobilephonesarethemaininventionofmoderntechnology

12、.TheyarecompletelypartofourdailylivesIfwelookatoursocietywecanseethatallkindsofpeopleareusingmobilephones.Maybetheyhavemanyadvantagesbuttheyalsoexperiencedrawbacks.Exaggeratedasthepictureisthephenomenonbehinditisratherth

13、oughtprocking.Withthedevelopmentofhightechequipmentespeciallysmartphonespeopleingrowingnumberstendtobecomeaddictedtotheexcessiveuseofthem.AccdingtoasurveycarriedoutinChinaDailyseveraldaysagoalmost47%ofcitizensexplainthat

14、theywouldexperiencecertainkindofanxietywithoutcellphonesath.Meanwhiletheoverusingofcellphonesfirstlywouldexertdetrimentalimpactonthehealthofus.Whatswseitwouldperfmanegativeacterininterpersonalrelationshipsincewehavelesst

15、imetocommunicate.Sciencetechnologymoderntoolsshouldbeservedasan“angel“toimproveourlivingstardratherthanadeviltodisturbournmallifecommunication.Justimagineliveonedaywithoutmobilephonewillyouberelaxed(185wds)電氣高頌89分，批改網(wǎng)評(píng)語(yǔ)：