讀后續(xù)寫案例分析--高考英語專題備考

1、讀后續(xù)寫案例分析It was one of the hottest days of the dry season. We had not seen rain in almost a month. The crops were dying. Cows had stopped giving milk. The creeks and streams were long gone back into the earth. It was a dr

2、y season that would bankrupt several farmers before it was through. Every day, my husband and his brothers would go about the tiring process of trying to get water to the farm. If we didn't see some rain soon, we wou

3、ld lose everything.It was on this day that I learned the true lesson of sharing and witnessed the only miracle I have seen with my own eyes. I was in the kitchen making lunch for my husband and his brothers when I saw my

4、 six-year-old son, Billy, walking toward the woods. He wasn't walking with the usual carefree abandon of a youth but with a serious purpose. I could only see his back. He was obviously walking with a great effort try

5、ing to be as still as possible. Minutes after he disappeared into the woods, he came running out again toward the house. I went back to make sandwiches, thinking that whatever task he had been doing was completed.Moments

6、 later, however, he was once again walking in that slow purposeful stride toward the woods. This activity went on for over an hour： walking carefully to the woods, and then running back to the house. Finally, my curiosit

7、y got the best of me. I crept out of the house and followed him on his journey.He was cupping both hands in front of him as he walked, very careful not to spill the water he held. Maybe two or three tablespoons were held

8、 in his tiny hands. I sneaked closer as he went into the woods. Branches and thorns slapped his little face but he did not try to avoid them. He had a much greater purpose. As I leaned in to spy on him, I saw an amazing

9、sight. A mother deer with a huge pair of deer horns appeared in front of him, with a baby fawn （幼鹿）lying on the dry ground. I almost screamed to get him away.注意：⑴所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；⑵至少使用5個短文中標有下畫線的關鍵詞語；⑶續(xù)寫局部分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好

10、；⑷續(xù)寫完成后，請用下畫線標出你所使用become aware ( 15) that it was darkening and clouds (16) were gathering above the woods. After months9 (17) drought, it finally rained. Thrilled shouting and crying coming in the distance (18) , T felt

11、 the rain, mixed with my tears, streaming down my cheeks.【批注】(9)這個句子用and連接了兩個分句，意義上當然沒有問題,但從意義中心來看, 兩個分句所述不同，最好能分開兩句寫，也就是改為：I rooted...by Billy. Without being disturbed...in the woods.(10) carry on的意思是continue an activit

12、y or task,意義上此處沒有問題，但需加介 詞with帶賓語。如你想表達“他做了或做完了這個計劃”，那么可用carry out(不帶with)。(11)在這篇文章里,what seemed like a century其實并不妥帖。如果是不好的事情, 比方危急的事情等，這個說法才合適。這個地方用after what seemed a very long time更 妥帖。(12) -ing是同時進行的動作，那么，此處sitting

13、 upon the ground是持續(xù)性動作(與 sitting down不同)，與瞬間動作paused同時進行，邏輯上有疙瘩。其實，這個句子還不如 把三個動作全部用一般過去時表示：He paused, sat down on the ground by the fawn and started to stroke its fur.另夕卜,這里的paused可以刪去，因為Billy應該是把水喂完了，后 面不可能再開始喂。(13) its

14、 fur 改成 his fur 更好。(14) too touched...to become aware 非常生硬，改成 so touched...that I wasn't aware...就好了。（15） aware后其實帶的是兩個從句，所以clouds前如能加引導詞由at,那么語言更為規(guī)范清楚。（16）原文講“We had not seen rain in almost a month”,此處 months' d

15、rought 不能說 不可能，但邏輯上可能不夠嚴密。（17）你如果想用一個獨立主格結構，最好加一個with,以明確指示這是一個獨立主 格結構，不讓讀者費心（因為它與后面的主句關系不是非常密切）。我個人意見（當然 別的老師會有不同想法）：其實,這個獨立主格結構與后面主句關系不密切（這些 shouting啥的跟I felt rain有什么關系？沒有關系），所以這樣用獨立主格結構并不好。 最后一句也許這樣改會好些：I heard th