university education

1、FsuccessfuldevelopmentofacountryshouldagovernmentfocusitsbudgetmeonveryyoungchildreneducationratherthanonuniversitiesHerecomesatopicof(我不是很推崇這個開頭，你可以換一個，模板很多嗎，盡量新穎點，這個太生硬了)publicinterest:whethergovernmentshouldinvestmone

2、ymeonyoungchildreneducationratherthanonuniversitiesFranklythesideofmycoinwillactuallyfacestowardanoppositeside.(句子不錯）Thatistosayitissuchachoicethatwillbetterraisespiritmindprovidetheopptunityofsuccessincareer.（這句是中式思維而且沒

3、交代誰的careeritis是強調(diào)句這個choice應該后面加個定語從句解釋下）Whatsmetherewillbehigherfundingrequisiteinuniversitiesthaninkindergartenprimaryschools.Thefollowinganalysisesexampleswillconsolidatemypointofview.Beyondnodoubtcomesmyfirstperspecti

4、vehighlightingthedramaticdevelopmentinthespiritmindinuniversityeducationwhichisfarbeyondstudentsimagination.Itiswidelyacknowledgedthatthebestperiodinlifefpeople(inone’slife)togainknowledgeisat(主語是period，這個at就不能有了)theirtw

5、entieswhichisjustinuniversity.Hadyouneverreceivededucationofhighqualityinuniversityyouwouldhavenotachievedadramaticboostinthoughtakeywdtoeveryindividualmemberinthismoderntime.Amanwithoutawisemindmanyofusbelievewillbecome

6、theunftunatevictimofadversecircumstancedeprivedofthegreatestopptunitiesofthetwentyfirstcentury.Therefetheattendanceofuniversityeducationdoesstrengthenoursoulsclearourvisionsinspireourambitionsmotivateourthoughts.Takethes

7、tudyofadvancedmathsasanexamplewhichisthecoursethatmostoftheuniversitystudentswilltake.Thelogicalthinkinginsideitcanactuallyencouragetheenthusiasmpassionofthestudentswhointhissituationmaydeveloptheiruniquecreativesolution

8、stotheiracademicproblems.Fromthiscaseitistheuniversityeducationthatdeveloponesgrowthinthewisdom.Notonlydoesthefirstpointjustifymysidebutthesecondalsoprovidesthefullsupptstatesthatuniversityeducationwilloffertheopptunityo

9、fsuccessincareers.Tobefrankmostofthecoursessetinuniversitiesareofmajwhicharespeciallydesignedffuturejob換成career.Thebetteryoudoinmajcoursethehigherpossibilitiesthatyouwillhavetofindagoodjobrelatedtoyourmaj.Herecomesanexam

10、plethatcanexactlyillustratemypoint.MybrotherstudiedaccountinginuniversityhegotanAfalmost80percentofhiscourses.Heevenwonthescholarshipeveryyear.Aftergraduationhesuccessfullybecameanaccountantinabigcompany.Mybrotheroftensa

11、ysthatitisthegoodperfmanceinmajcoursesduringuniversitythatgivehimthejob.這個表達不好accesstosuccessFromthepersonalexperienceofmybrotherIcanconcludethattheuniversityeducationdoesmakegreatcontributionstothesuccessoffuturecareer.

12、Inspiteoftheaboveconvincingproofherecomesmythirdviewwhichconcentratesonthefundingneedinuniversity.Admittedlythehighqualityuniversityeducationdependsonthesuperiprofesssadvancedequipmentstogetherwiththebroadclassroomslabat

13、ies.Weretherenotenoughfundingsupptedwherewouldtheseconditionscomefrom中式思維再斟酌下Fromthispointhardlycouldanyoneelsedenymyperspective.BasedontheabovediscussionIfeelsafetoconcludethatitisnecessaryfgovernmenttobudgetmeonunivers

14、ity.PS:下劃線部分是套用陳曦上課時講過的萬能句子。文章太長了以后寫規(guī)定時間半小時450個詞這篇文章如果你考試能打出這個字數(shù)25肯定沒問題但是是不可能的我想說的文章的主要問題有以下幾點1.最重要的一點論點選的不好題目的意思問政府資助誰更好而不是學大學有什么好處或是必須的這樣看只有第三點比較對12兩點稍微改改就好多了要扣題比如加上一句：所以政府多給大學錢會使青年人更好而你第一點的結(jié)尾變成了所以上大學很重要2.有些細節(jié)要扣一扣但是呢抓住